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Coverage Summary:

IDA is a compelling character-driven drama that has a strong, three-dimensional protagonist, interesting supporting characters -all tested by the struggles of the Rhode Island/lighthouse life. While some of the supporting characters - including Richard and William - could have used a bit more development and incorporation into Ida's story, the script had a lot going for it. This would make for a strong low-budget feature.

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HARDCASTLE is a well-paced period drama centering around the themes of survival, morality, unions, violence and family. One of the main shortcomings of Hardcastle is that it’s not really clear what the protagonist's (Bill’s) story is here. It starts out as him wanting to get home to his family after struggling in Chicago. But that goal gets lost quickly, and a new sense of purpose for Bill isn't found until rather late in the story. Furthermore, Bill is too good of a guy. He needs more shortcomings and complexity. We needed to see just how beaten down he got during his time in Chicago.

Nice here is Bill's relationship and romance with Marlee. Though this relationship could use more tension and layers. It's a bit too straightforward and familiar as written.

Ella Bone is a strong character in the story - one who we want to see more of. But she doesn't yet serve a strong enough purpose in Bill's life. She's got to force him to address the problems he has, and the mistakes he's making by doing Hardcastle's dirty work.

An entertaining story with great potential with further development.

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THERE’S AN ALIEN IN MY BATHTUB is a pandemic-era sci-fi comedy that explores some interesting themes, including germophobia/paranoia, isolation, friendship and family. The writing moves swiftly with a crisp nature that flows well through the entire draft.

While Norman is a likeable guy in the story, he is in need of more depth to his character and in his relationship with the alien Pi-Za. What are Norman’s wants and needs in his life? How have his limitations as a germaphobe prevented him from living a life fulfilled? And how does his relationship with Pi-Za change that? In next drafts, work to bring in much more tension and conflict to Norman’s story, and get him and Pi-Za on the road to find the crashed space ship no later than the story’s midpoint.

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LETTING GO deals with some strong thematics at a rough part in the history of AIDS, the early 1980s. While the general concept and thematics of the screenplay are good, the script's protagonist, Josh, doesn't have a clear goal and therefore, a strong storyline. In addition, his relationships with lover Alex, mother Alicia and sister Faith, are underdeveloped. This is in part due to the fact that these supporting characters don't have a strong enough storyline of their own.

Also in need of further development is the story's plot. As written, most of the dramatic points in the plot are given to the supporting characters, not Josh, the protagonist. It's not until well into the story that we see him make decisions in the story, and that's far too late.

The script also has some formatting issues and spelling errors throughout. There are many incorrect uses of YOUR and YOU'RE.

While the script is in need of further development, the story does have the potential to work well as a low-budget indie film.