Talentville coverage for Pink Slip (4-2012)

While this script follows the tried-and-true conventions of the romantic comedy genre and effectively creates its largely likeable characters, a lack of serious tension or stakes, as well as the absence of true character arcs for the leads, prevents it from rising to its full potential. This is not to say that the characters or conflict are inherently flawed, but rather that the way in which they are developed over the course of the script is not as effective as it should be. More work is needed to bring out the conflict and romantic charge between Gabby and Jess, to delve into the pain in their backstories that has led them to where they are now, and to connect the problems of their past to specifically why they want and need the job/love they are currently seeking. In addition, some work revising and improving the supporting characters and the demands they place on the central duo will help streamline the story and laser-focus each and every conflict squarely on the same central questions, of whether they can overcome the difficulties of their pasts, and whether they will place work before love.